I know you want an honest comment, so I will try.

I love the background in general. Having it all monotone in one colour and faded in parts gives is a great look. I like how there is whitish strip down the centre to draw the eye to the egg. I don’t understand what the diagonal lines are for, doesn’t seem to fit with the theme of the back ground.

I don’t know if I like the egg, (well I like the egg, just not how it looks) I don’t know if you drew it, or if it was a pre-made image, all I can say is, its hard looking, almost cartoon felling. The rest of you piece has the soft faded look and the egg looks odd. Also the blood is a bit off. From what I can tell you want it to look like there is blood on the edges, but that means there should have been blood on the inside as well. Also, there would be a small pool of blood inside the egg at the bottom, because gravity would have pulled the blood down off the sides. There would also be some on the ground with the small pieces.

The poem it self is great, gets in with your emotions and also fits well with the moon the rest of the piece makes. My only problem was trying to read it. I think you could find a better cursive font that would be easier to read.

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Thanks, ill kepp on this in mind if i work on this again.

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lol..... no problem

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When your pet bird sees you reading the newspaper, does he wonder why you're just sitting there, staring at carpeting?

My Website --> [link]
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I like this. The general color scheme is nice, it has alot going on, but it doesn't seem busy. I hope that makes sense. This is a great piece.

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<smoking-mirrors>I can pretend to have a penis for you, Joe.
<smoking-mirrors>Just like when I was a little girl.
<smoking-mirrors>Except I was a mermaid then.
<caveatLECTOR>with a penis?

yeah i understand you completely, thats one thing that took me a long time to get where it didnt look busy, alot of composition changes. thanks

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"Complexity is
Being human, yet this is
My simple knowledge."

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P.S. Replies and post's to my work are greatly appreciated. Check out my Galle